Dilemma

June 17, 2010 by Brown Shuga

Poetry: I’m not a fan at all but I read this poem written by a colleague of mine and I thought it was so beautiful, I had to share. I have a feeling a lot of women will identify with it so please read and give your “constructive” feedback. She’s still new at this and would love to get more involved in poetry. Advise about what she (and other aspirant poets) can do to get her work out there will be appreciated.

DILEMMA

There she is ….

In her pure white dress.

Walking, Leaving her past behind,

Rejoicing her present and

Embracing her future.

She is a Goddess,

Her smile melts the earth she walks on

Her dress blinds the eyes of the longing,

Her scent caresses the senses of the envying

She walks the walk,

Be it the walk to freedom or boredom,

But @ the end of this isle she walks to him.

Their vows pierce the hearts of the jealous

As she declares her undying love for him

The way she looks into his eyes,

Confirms she gives her self to him,

Mind, Body and spirit.

To have and to hold

To laugh and to cry

To live and to die.

As he vows in front of us,

To love her till death do them apart

The tears fill my eyes.

As I hear the words rush out of his mouth,

The memories come creeping in

Remembering the times shared and lost

The laughs and the cries in vain

The love made and the sadness endured

During these uneventful stolen moments together

Reminiscing of the days gone by unnoticed

The time that I went by unattended

The feelings that poured out uncensored

The calls that went unanswered

And everything I went through unwillingly

But went through it all because I chose to love him unconditionally.

No man no cry I sing to my heart which has been broken into numerous times.

No man No cry I sing to my body mishandled not only once

I sing to my soul, trying to soothe and mend the pieces fallen

I cry to myself seeking comfort in undeserving arms

I beat myself up over how stupid I have been,

Believing he would stay with me.

Love me, Care for me the way he does her.

I also try to pick up the shattered pieces of my heart

For I have been robbed of the opportunity to decide on my own if I wanted to live like this,

Through lies, Deception and misrepresentation of himself

Mad for I have given into a doomed relationship that I never bargained for.

As the weeks slowly approach

This vision of him marrying her becomes clearer.

As the days goes by

This suspense starts to suffocate me

As the clock patiently ticks

My heart beat slows down at the thought of him committing himself to her

As I sit here on my own in this lonely room

I realize what a waste of time, love and devotions it has been

And the line between love and hate quickly thins.

I feel my stomach shiver as I lay here thinking about him

Coz I despise him more when I think about his wedding day

But I want him next to me every time he is not.

This is adultery is ultimately my biggest dilemma.

By Lerato Ditshego ©

same here mama ka gundi…as much as im breaking apart i wud also include how sorry i feel for the other woman n how i wish him n also her luck (ddnt use ‘them’ on purpose). Lerato- im not an expert on poetry n all but i also write..it makes the story mo personal when u include all the parties involved so that eg if ever theres a guy who’s reading this n in the same shoes as ur ex can also relate naye…i don know if im makin sense.
Other than that great piece! Jus needs a few touchups here n there

Keenyah on Fri, 18th Jun 2010 12:07 pm

She’s a talented poet.
And would love to read more of her stuff…

Love your work!!!

Lerato on Fri, 18th Jun 2010 2:01 pm

With love like this I am confident there will be more from me to put out there, Thank you all you inspire me to work harder at this…

Mahlodi on Fri, 18th Jun 2010 2:19 pm

Job well done my-f, you go girl!

xoli on Fri, 18th Jun 2010 2:19 pm

good and very good, just what many weman go through with a vivid discription.
I would like to however point out that the are many man (males) who go through the same things and their voices are being muted simply because they are man. many other owfull things perpetrated my weman towards man happen and they are being ignored or even being laughed at, by even other man simply because they are man.before it was a white man that abused black man and now it is the very black ladys that are doing the same.

Luluwise on Fri, 18th Jun 2010 3:16 pm

Bravo Lerato, very moving indeed.Hope to enjoy more of your work gal. I can relate to some stanzas (Lol as we used to call them at school). Beautifully written and speaks to a large number of people.The feelings expressed are common, most people have experienced adultery,unfaithfullness, broken vows. Just a little word of caution, you don’t have to write as if its based on personal experience (although you are allowed to), sometimes make it seem abstract (as if you have imagined it , as if the concepts are foreign to you). Hope that makes sense. Thank you and good luck.

fabulicious on Fri, 18th Jun 2010 3:36 pm

luluwise u spot on! Wat do u think of my suggestion? (b honest)

Lerato on Fri, 18th Jun 2010 4:53 pm

Point taken Luluwise and Fabulicious, Though I have pesonalised this piece, there are some that were written from an observer’s point of view, I understand what you mean guys.
Fabulicious its not mainly focused on the guy because it expresses the thoughts of the other woman, the thrird wheel in this triangle who’s hurt and betrayed by this man thats about to marry another woman instead of her.

Nthoentle on Sat, 19th Jun 2010 12:24 am

Rato this is good babes,ake rate poetry but I enjoyed. Shem its sad though!

Mary-G on Mon, 21st Jun 2010 9:58 am

WOW Rato, I enjoy poems, hey I love them bring them on… girl U a a star, some of us are going through that thank you for the words of encouragement.We need people I you to remind us of who we are.BRAVOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO

Shandi on Thu, 24th Jun 2010 3:59 pm

Beautiful!! Inspiring!!

Malebo on Thu, 24th Jun 2010 4:19 pm

This is just confirmation that we sholud stop believing he will leave her for you. If he told you about her , he probably will not leave her!!

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